Murderball- A Body Paragraph

 

So… when we’re planning our body paragraphs, we need to consider the following:

 

  • That our topic sentences LOGICALLY EXTEND from the thesis statement constructed in your introduction.
  • That our thesis statement AND topic sentences use the key words/terms from the question to help frame our argument.

You can see from the image about that the thesis statement uses the key terms from the question AND establishes a clear argument.

 

 

Above is sample body paragraph to Murderball. Here are my teaching and learning points:

 

  • I’ve tried to use the key terms from the question in my topic sentence, as well as ensuring the topic sentence adds direction and focus.
  • I wanted this topic sentence to logically extend from my thesis statement in a logical and explicit way.
  • The second sentence engages with the ‘how’ of the question. This means that the body paragraph starts with an engagement with ALL of the key terms of the question.
  • There is reference to relevant SWAT codes.
  • The body paragraph references specific scenes rather than treating the characters more generally. There is evidence that the text has been analysed and engaged with, rather than merely described.
  • The final sentence links back to the topic sentence and thesis statement, thereby trying to construct a cohesive and logical argument extending from the key terms of the question.

 

Therefore, what I’ve tried to do here is to describe a PROCESS more than anything else. It’s really important that you construct your ideas in tandem with the key terms of the question, but also an argument that is both logical and cohesive. The actual content of this example is largely secondary to the PROCESS.

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