Please download the notes from Kate McCaffrey’s workshop on creative writing, which was held this week.
Kate MC Caffrey’s Creative Writing Menu
Please download the notes from Kate McCaffrey’s workshop on creative writing, which was held this week.
Kate MC Caffrey’s Creative Writing Menu
Here is a link to a FANTASTIC resource which might prove useful in your podcast assessment. You will be given time in class to work on this, but it will only be a limited amount.
https://www.thepodcasthost.com/planning/how-to-start-a-podcast/
Here’s a version of the modelled example from our last lesson. As you can see, this version has been annotated to highlight the language selection and some of the literary features of the response.
Make sure you look at the annotations carefully as this will allow you to explore some of the ways in which the text has been constructed to invite a specific response from the reader.
Personal Writing
First Day at University
As my step-dad’s car rumbled through the gates of my new home, taking care to avoid the groups of students huddled together, I could feel my heart slowly beginning to sink into the darkest recesses of my body. What should’ve been a celebration of being the first Jakeway to go to university, suddenly felt more like being dragged to the gallows. It didn’t feel right.
My fiancée grabbed my hand and her smile said something that faintly suggested she was trying (and failing) to reassure me that everything was going to be OK. My mother was busying herself with the occasion whilst trying not to give away her own sense of grief. It was certainly a morbidly chastening experience.
The university itself was bathed in sunshine and the chapel’s roof pointed to the sky, as if to say ‘the only way is up from here’. And a majestic sight it was too. It resembled a gilded crown, all glass and steel pointing to the heavens but at the moment all I felt was that it was crown that was far too big for my own head, like Macbeth’s ‘borrowed robes’. I’d always considered myself to be smart, but at the moment all I felt was a fraud.
The Students’ Union building was our intended destination. It was here that I was to be dropped off, deposited. Abandoned. Apparently the university had planned some of those tedious ice-breaking ‘games’ to welcome all the new, scarf-wearing undergraduates to Canterbury Christ Church College, to soften the blow. I looked into the faces of those gathered around me and many of them seemed more ‘up for it’ than I was. Even at 23, I felt I was too old for this kind of nonsense but I sauntered into the room nonetheless and struggled to get my bearings over the mic-wielding MC who was struggling to establish a carnival atmosphere.
However, it was time to say goodbye to my mother, step-dad and fiancée. As we shared our last hugs, they turned and walked out of the door. I tried unsuccessfully to stifle the tears that demanded to make themselves known to everyone and I trudged reluctantly towards the margins of bar where the Freshers Week was taking place. As the tears continued, suddenly I was four again, and this was my primary school, and I was all alone, and scared. A stranger in a strange town, where no-one knew me or even cared.
Teaching and Learning Points:
What does your memory look like on the page?
The following question was taken from the 2019 Semester 1 Year 12 ATAR English examination produced by the ETAWA:
Create a persuasive text aimed at a teenage audience which starts with an anecdote.
Question Deconstruction and Planning
As with all questions, we need to break it down and make sure that we understand what the question is asking of us. We need to understand what the key discriminators are and get our thoughts organised before we begin writing.
Let’s break this question down…
Possible Topics
Climate change
#Metoo
Gender equality… Yeah… this one.
Social media
Instagram and its effect on body image
Cyberbullying
University- the first year
Environmental issues- recycling etc.
Race
Cultural change
Lowering the age to vote
Sample Response (Gender Equality)
I lead a very glamorous life. VERY. Some might even say that I’m living the dream and I guess I am. So… here’s a real, authentic and honest account of a shopping trip to Coles. I was pushing my fully-laden trolley down the cleaning products isle when a woman remarked to me that I was very brave. It took me a moment to process what she said, before she pointed at my bright pink fingernails. My daughters often ‘treat’ me to a manicure and this week, their chosen colour was hot pink. And there I was in Coles not really aware of anything much, other than trying to get the shopping done with minimum fuss. My only response was a muttered, stuttered ‘thanks’ and I continued shunting my recalcitrant trolley onwards. But then I thought… ‘How the hell are my hot pink fingernails a symbol of bravery?’ Have I reached the apex of bravery by being seen IN PUBLIC with bright pink fingernails? And what would the people in war-torn countries, asylum seekers on perilous seas in rickety boats or a soldier with a gun in their hand think?
In truth, the answer is perfectly simple and it’s ludicrous to think that a middle-aged man strutting his stuff with hot pink fingernails is in anyway brave at all. It isn’t. Or, at least, it shouldn’t be as the gender binary is slowly being challenged and contested. As it should be. We are gathered here today to promote not only gender equality but to show our authentic face to the world and to make no apologies for it You, the adults of tomorrow, have an opportunity to construct the world in your image and what a joyous image it will be if a teenager doesn’t feel guilty about their identity, that a young person doesn’t feel guilty about who they are, or feel that they have to live a lie. Gender identity is one of the most pressing issues facing teenagers today. This convention of young people here assembled has the power to ensure no-one lives a lie anymore.
I’m horrified every time I walk into a toy shop. The stark reality is that the gender binary exists- in all its forms- whenever I’m asked to buy a present for one my daughter’s friends. The girls’ section is littered, splashed, dominated by pinks and purples, dolls and domesticity, glitter and gloss. The boys’? construction, cars, tools, science stuff. This is outrageous. Do we even stop to consider that one day our boys might be parents and that looking after a baby might be a skill worth learning? Or at least being a caring human being. I find it all quite exhausting. It really doesn’t challenge anyone’s construction of gender if a boy chooses to play with a doll, or wants to do ballet and why should it anyway?
Planning- Rest of Response
My sample response would include the following sections if I was to continue writing…
I’d go on to look at Billy Elliot (film) as an example.
Might offer a refutation/rebuttal.
Perhaps find some statistics to back this up. That the gender binary is being contested.
An appeal to our sense of values… that we want people to grow up to be their best selves, to be empathetic, to judge people on the ‘content of their character’, not by how they look.
Then I’d end with an appeal to paint your nails with pride, dance like no-one’s watching and to live an authentic self.
Teaching and Learning Points
As you can see, I’ve used a reasonable range of persuasive devices (rhetorical questions, triplets, emotive language, alliteration, anecdotes, repetition) as well as SHOWING my audience my context, audience and purpose without TELLING them it. The planning shows that I’d want to offer further proofs (facts and an appeal to values/justice) before getting to the emotional climax of my speech and offering a solution or, at least, a challenge to the audience to go out into the world to live their best lives.
You will need to copy these links and paste them into your preferred browser:
High Noon- https://online.clickview.com.au/libraries/videos/fac3365f-ce0a-065f-43e3-f96bcbcd4971/high-noon-movie-
The Dressmaker- https://online.clickview.com.au/libraries/videos/25ce63be-600b-1c8a-8a81-3230cb8c5dfa/the-dressmaker-movie-
Attached below is a study guide for The Dressmaker. You will need to read this and familiarise yourself with this information prior to viewing the film.
Dressmaker Study Guide-2jkz4qg
We will be using the document below to frame our investigation into this text:
The Dressmaker – directed by Jocelyn Moorhouse-2ip2j7h
Remember- It is essential that you view each of these texts repeatedly prior to your Semester 1 examination and prior to any assessments which might require you to respond to these texts.
The next module of work concerns studying a particular genre. We will study two films; High Noon and The Dressmaker. High Noon can be considered a film in the Western genre. It depicts the ‘Wild West’ in uncompromising terms. The Dressmaker is more a revenge drama which borrows from the Western genre and is a more contemporary film set in Australia.
Year 12 Westerns Booklet-trwsuy
The booklet above will give you an introduction to the genre. Please read this carefully and annotate in as much detail as possible.
Read the resource above to introduce yourself to some of the dominant themes of Westerns.
Dressmaker Study Guide-2jkm3u0
Here is a study guide to The Dressmaker. There is plenty of information on both films on the internet and you’ll need to ensure you conduct detailed research on both the Western genre and the films we’ll be studying closely.
The next text we will study in Year 12 ATAR English is the documentary film Murderball. The text follows the USA quad rugby team as they prepare for the Athens Paralympic Games. The chief protagonists are Mark Zupan (a USA quad rugby player) and Joe Soares (the coach of Team Canada who once played quad rugby for the USA). We will explore the text for constructions of masculinity, how disability is constructed within a sports’ narrative and how we are positioned to respond to hegemonic masculinity, particularly in the treatment of the female characters who appear- briefly- throughout the text.
Please note that this text is studied for Section B (Responding) of the ATAR examination and it is a text you will be expected to know in significant detail. While we will watch this documentary in class (and analyse it), you will also be expected to watch this text through in your own time and build your understanding through independent research.
Here are a range of resources which will compliment your study of this course text:
Murderball Initial Close Analysis-2krd9z4
Murderball Focus Questions and Ideas-27f6zkp
Murderball Feature Article-19ebs1i
Murderball Documentary Study-2kn67eg
Murderball and Masculinity-1gcl8kt
Murder Ball Visual Analysis-26pkh0x
Challenging Normalcy – Masculinity and Disability in Murderball-117yhdp
Please note that Murderball is available to view on ClickView. A link to the text is below:
https://online.clickview.com.au/libraries/categories/fcbefc28-ff38-326f-00ae-74f83a618b2c/videos/75fbf7d5-8758-f8cb-d92b-05ffe4a495ec/murderball-movie-